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Posted: Sep 25, 2008 - 05:50 PM
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Mesmerized
Joined: May 09, 2006
Posts: 5795
Location: Black Mesa Research Facility
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Yeah, haven't posted here for a while... enjoy.
Everything you touch is destroyed in a moment,
All you live for is to cause others pain,
But you made the mistake of doing this to me,
Because I refuse to play your twisted little game.
You sit up at night, writing with hate,
You scribble about those you have broken,
But no, I refuse to take this anymore,
You will not speak until I have spoken.
You call me rotten, evil, disgusting,
I often think you've caught your reflection,
Because the only person who fits this description,
Is the one who is giving the verbal dissection.
The biggest mistake you made my friend,
Was bringing my dead father into your tirade,
I wanted your blood for saying his name,
I will not rest until that debt is paid.
You think binary and HTML will hurt me now?
No, because I know your secret fear,
You can't take abuse like you give it out,
So I can sit and wait for you here,
Knowing you will never find me.
You're vicious, you're spiteful,
You're poison from the very worst snake,
And although I'm standing strong,
I've had as much as I can take.
I want you gone.
Because although I maybe broken...
I will never be rotten like you. |
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Posted: Sep 25, 2008 - 10:15 PM
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Spider
Joined: Jan 14, 2008
Posts: 480
Location: Being kicked out of my mind...
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NICE!  i loke this poem! |
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Posted: Sep 26, 2008 - 09:54 PM
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Joined: Jul 07, 2006
Posts: 42
Location: Hot Springs, Arkansas
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You call me rotten, evil, disgusting,
I often think you've caught your reflection,
Because the only person who fits this description,
Is the one who is giving the verbal dissection.
Good concept....nice viewpoint you give to the reader....my favorite part. |
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Posted: Sep 27, 2008 - 12:56 AM
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Spider
Joined: Jan 14, 2008
Posts: 480
Location: Being kicked out of my mind...
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| ^Oh hello bluemoon. Never saw u before so hi! XD |
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Posted: Sep 27, 2008 - 03:43 AM
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Member
Joined: Jul 26, 2008
Posts: 239
Location: in the valley of the walls
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Great choice of words, and smooth flow from one quatrain to another. Amazingly, the entire poem expresses exactly how I feel about certain people in my life.
~*[claire]*~ wrote:
Because although I maybe broken...
I will never be rotten like you.
These lines say it all. Thank you. This poem made my day. |
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Posted: Sep 27, 2008 - 04:36 AM
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Joined: Jul 07, 2006
Posts: 42
Location: Hot Springs, Arkansas
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^Oh hello bluemoon. Never saw u before so hi! XD
lol...yea, I'm kinda new to this forum....hi  |
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Posted: Sep 27, 2008 - 10:12 PM
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Spider
Joined: Jan 14, 2008
Posts: 480
Location: Being kicked out of my mind...
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| ^welocmes to the written fourm. |
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Posted: Oct 03, 2008 - 03:34 PM
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Spider
Joined: Nov 23, 2007
Posts: 369
Location: Im a computer lab!
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This is a very well written poem, if you haven't written anything in awhile, you should start posting again.
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You call me rotten, evil, disgusting,
I often think you've caught your reflection,
Because the only person who fits this description,
Is the one who is giving the verbal dissection.
Interesting how you turned the insulting around to come right back to the person. |
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the avi is a character named Pzycho, who I drew myself. xD
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Posted: Oct 19, 2008 - 11:44 AM
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Spider
Joined: Mar 08, 2007
Posts: 510
Location: Here rocking your socks off!
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you can transform this poem into a song. If I could use it in my band but of course with your premission  |
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