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Posted: Oct 08, 2005 - 10:53 PM
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Cigaro
Joined: May 10, 2005
Posts: 2531
Location: Buffalo, NY Where SOAD never comes for a show!
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To release some stress of being depressed
Feeling down, less than dirt
More and more it starts to hurt
The pain of failure, pain of grief
So overwhelming, just won't leave
I'm stuck in a hole the world has dug me
Chance of hope is fading quickly
Farther down the hole is created
By a world in which I am hated
Buried in shit, broken my bones
Just back up and leave me alone
Alone in my world
My world that is mine
A place I call home
Because your world isn't fine
My pain is endless
My grief, forever
Someday I will be liberated
Someday I may be freed
But until that day arrives
I'll remain buried in shit
This world is against me
Nothing you say can change that
Everytime I try to look up
I get a faceful of dirt
To the world that you call home
I say Fuck You
So for now I'll go to my world
Where one day I might be lucky
To have things go right
To go my way, the right way, the only way
It should ever be. |
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Posted: Oct 08, 2005 - 11:04 PM
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Needle
Joined: Aug 29, 2005
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| powerful stuff there FGWB! Well written, looks like our sig makers are turning into poets! |
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Posted: Oct 08, 2005 - 11:16 PM
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Joined: Apr 16, 2005
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To the world that you call home
I say Fuck You
Bravo! I absolutely love the feeling in that whole thing, FGWB. |
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Posted: Oct 09, 2005 - 12:13 AM
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Needle
Joined: Mar 16, 2005
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Location: maryland
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| u stil make great sigs! |
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Posted: Oct 09, 2005 - 08:55 PM
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Cigaro
Joined: May 29, 2005
Posts: 2638
Location: UK
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oh my god....that is amazing....you really put across what you are feeling  |
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Posted: Oct 09, 2005 - 09:03 PM
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Dart
Joined: May 10, 2005
Posts: 1026
Location: Oklahoma
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Wow, sounds like your having a rough time. It's very powerful writing, you really convey how you feel.
Do you have music to go with it? That'd make a pretty cool song. |
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Posted: Oct 10, 2005 - 03:25 AM
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Cigaro
Joined: May 10, 2005
Posts: 2531
Location: Buffalo, NY Where SOAD never comes for a show!
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I don't have music for it.
Yet. Me and my guitarist are developing new riffs everyday and we're on our way to getting a full song soon.
I think the lyrics really reflect the way I felt when I wrote it. |
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Posted: Oct 10, 2005 - 03:33 AM
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Member
Joined: Jun 22, 2005
Posts: 332
Location: Arkansas. We have guns. We use them. Don't be dumb.
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| It's pretty good. I have a question though, and it's for everyone. Why not just post all your poems in one thread, instead of having a different thread for each poem? It'll take up less board space and pages will load faster. |
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Posted: Oct 28, 2005 - 01:11 AM
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Spider
Joined: Oct 17, 2005
Posts: 397
Location: Buffalo NY...i think
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hey, you told me to take a look at your stuff on here so i did. your poem is great(really powerful, lots of emotion)... but not everyone hates you, i don't hate you, you're awesome. hope that helps (i don't know if that really means anything to you, coming from me and all)
alot of times i feel like that too...you should try to put it to music |
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